It's a little weird, having a piece of writing I'm not going to submit for a letter grade.
Now I'm not going to post the whole thing here, at least not quite yet. But it's probably some of my favorite writing I've ever done. And it still needs some editing on it before I'm ready to say it's absolutely and totally completed. Otherwise, it's done. I did it. A written piece by me, for me
So until I'm ready to slap it down in front of everybody I can, here's a taste.
"The souls of the mountains are
restless. They surge sluggishly from the earth, pressing upward as determinedly
as they root deeply beneath the crust. Their slowness is mistaken for
motionlessness. In the endless expanse of time, they heave and roil like great
waves of turf and rock, rising with the shifts in the land and eroding with the
ruthless beating of the weather. In the swirls of snow and rumbles of thunder
they murmur softly. Every footstep on their surface is like a pinhead pressed
against the skin, a sharp pressure too flat to puncture, irritating and
tingling. Trees sway in gales like hairs pulling at their follicles. The steady
beat of rain sheers off thin layers from the mountain's body. The brutal heat
of sun bakes the clay and plants once soft and damp. And people with their
sharp metal tools chip away faster than any storm, carving them to their needs,
never taking the living bodies of the land shuddering so slowly in pain, in
rage. The souls of the mountains are restless."
Until next post on Thursday, folks!
Cut the adverbs.
ReplyDeleteThey kinda paint the picture for me, but if we were cutting, which ones go?
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